Bakugan at world's end

Once upon on a planet none like anyother there once was peace on this planet. But now it is filled with death running along side every corner. But how did this happen you ask?! It is because of one day one year one second one split second one minute that changed everything! Chaos bakugan! They were the ones who started the war against all neighbouring planet's and won. They ended up enslaving a whole quarter of the universe! But one day a historical event happened a tsunami of bakugan fell from the sky each different in every way. So one little girl picked up a pyrus and bakugan. The bakugan opened and greeted the young girl saying have no fear i am not a chaos bakugan i am here to help! The little girl asked what his name was. The bakugan said it's name was Charzon(Char-Zon).Then charzon asked the little girl what her was and she said Jupitar. So they promissed each other to partner up find recruits and battle the chaos bakugan to save the planet of which i'll only tell you the name at the end! So from there on
watch out chaos bakugan for here comes Jupitar and Charzon.!

Next time on Bakugan at world's end Jupitar travel's far and wide and struggles to find a team member but out of nowere two strange battles challenge them to a battle for her bakugan. The odds maybe two to one but we can do this! Bakugan brawl!

Okay the reason i wrote this chapter is because i thought when was a girl the most pwerful brawler on her home planet?
But please at least read i'm sure it might be intresting?
This is my first time writting a story so please understand if it is bad!
But if bad delete topic.
But i'll never be as good as dragofan010 or DMH!
But if you want me to continue ok!

Heh all this searching stuff is starting to get boring charzon! said Jupitar.
I agree but why don't we stop and battle here? i mean you still have a lot to learn about me!Said Charzon. Hey you two! ???????. Yeah you two are tresspassing on chaos property do you have a chaos bakugan? the two chaos soldiers said.
No! This is an orginal good bakugan! Said Jupitar. Okay if it is so good i'd like to see it in battle! Said one of the soldiers. Okay let's battle then! Said Jupitar. But if you lose you give your bakugan and become a soldier. The second soldier said. And if i win? Said Jupitar. We give you our bakugan! The two soldiers said.



Gate card set! The second soldier said. Bakugan brawl. They all said.
Rise DARKUS Caladal!
Stand VENTUS Infrabreeze!
Rise Pyrus Charzon!
Battle chat mode:
Soldier1: First let's test your bakugan! Shall we say ABILITY ACTIVATE! Infrared!
Juptar: Easy attack! ABILITY ACTIVATE! Flame spinner!
Charzon: Ok!
Soldier2: Hahaha! Flame spinner? Don't make us laugh! ABILITY ACTIVATE! Hyper hurricane!
Charzon: AAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHH! Jupitar!
Jupitar: ABILITY ACTIVATE! Blazing Tornado!
Charzon: Thanks!
Soldier1: Abilty activate! Caldron freeze!
Jupitar: What?
Soldier2: Ability activate! Heavy wind flybow!
Charzon: Jupitar ! Focus!
Jupitar: Alright! ABILITY ACTIVATE! Hyper ERRUPTION!
Soldier2: Ohno you don't! Gate card open freeze enemy!
Charzon: What the!
Soldier1: Time to end this! Ability activate! Drain enemy!
Charzon: AAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ENOUGH! ULTRA FLAME TORRENT!
Soldier2: What is? run Infrabreeze!
Soldier1: Wait! Ability activate Hyper flame shield!
Charzon: UHUHUH! Flame Detonation!
Jupitar: Charzon!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Soldiers: AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
Caladal and Infrabreeze: AAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!

Normal chat mode:
You too cough up the bakugan! Said Jupitar.
Fine a deal is a deal! Here you go! the soldiers said.
-The soldiers ran away saying- We will be back! Do you here us!
-Jupitar thinking what was that energy?what else could Chazon be hidding from me?-

Next time on Bakugan at world's end, Jupitar and Charzon meet a new rival who turns out to be an ally. Meanwhile things get shaky when the big boss finds out and sends a spy to exterminate them. What will happen? Who will become victorias?
All thoose questions shall be answeared next time on bakugan at world's end!

So Charzon what else can you do? i mean just yesterday you extinguished and outstanding Attack! Jupitar said with confussion.
Don't worry partner all shal be revealed! but first to save your planet.
Wait i think i hear something let's hide in the bushes. Charzon said.
HEY I HEARD AND THE BATTLE YOU GUYS DID! I know you guys are here!
I can feel it! So come out and brawl me! ????? said.
First of all i don't like your attitude! And second of all who is guys here?
I mean really can't you see i'm a lady! Jupitar said.
Hold up there's no to get so upset. I'm Zero and i want to challenge that powerful bakugan of yours to a battle! Zero said.
How can you battle me with no bakugan? I feel no energy around you! Charzon said.
That's why i'm now saying look up! Zero said.


What is that thing? I've never seen anything like it before in my life? said Jupitar.
That's my partner darkus STARSTRIKER! His the one who found you two! said Zero.
Then here are the rules if i win you join me on our quest to save our planet. said Jupitar. And if i win i take your bakugan! said Zero.
Okay let's do this! Field open!!!!!!



Gate card set Jupitar said!
Bakugan
Brawl they said!
Soar Sky raider STARSTRIKER!
Rise Charzon!
Battle chat mode:
Jupitar: You've got no chance!
Zero: Yeah right!
Charzon: May the best bakugan win!
Starstriker: Like wise!
Jupitar: ABILITY ACTIVATE! Blazing humer!
Charzon: Argh!
Zero: So your actually fighting hand to hand? Well try this! ABILITY ACTIVATE! Dark impact!
Starstriker: Now eat this!!!!! YYYYYYYYAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!
Jupitar: Oh no you don't ABILITY CARD ACTIVATE! Blazing Tornado!
Charzon: Weak attacks demolish easily!
Zero: *smile's* ABILITY ACTIVATE! Heavyweight striker!
Starstriker: Let's see if you can catch up!
Jupitar: ABILITY ACTIVATE Blazing Humer!
Charzon: We'll see about that!
Zero: So! Do you even know about about bakunano?
Jupitar: Wait what! No how did you get bakunano?
Zero: I have my resources now take this bakunano boost! Aero Phantom
Charzon: What is that?
Starstriker: It's a weapon i'm going to defeat you with!
Charzon: We'll see about that! Your not the only one with bakunano here Jupitar summon Heavy blazer!
Jupitar: What! But okay i guess. *typing heavy blazer*
Watch voice: Heavy Blazer ready
Jupitar: Bakunano boost!
Zero: Grr... time to kick it into high gear! Bakunano abilty activate! Ghostly riot!
Charzon: ARGH! what's happening? Jupitar? Hey isn't that Drapion? Drapion what happened to Starstriker?
Fake drapion: I don't know!
Jupitar: SNAP OUT OF IT!
Zero: There's no use saving him!
Charzon:*Turns around*
Zero: ABILITY ACTIVATE! Heavy slicer!
Fake Drapion:*Attacks Charzon from behind*
Charzon: ARGH! What's going on?
Jupitar: CHARZON HIS NOT DRAPION!
Zero: Stop wasting your breath he can't hear you! If i was you i'd just give up!
Jupitar: I won't GIVE UP! As long as i can still say GATE CARD OPEN! Twin Back!
Zero: Wait what nooooo!!!!!
Jupiter: Charzon that's not Drapion!
Charzon: I hear you and thank you! Now let's Deal with theese fools!
Jupitar: Yeah let's do it! ABILITY ACTIVATE! Flamethrower!
Charzon: *flamethrower* Flame detention!
Jupiter: Oh no not again! Charzon! Snap out of it!! CHHHHHHHHHHHHHAAAAAAAAAAAAAZZZZZZOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOON!
Charzon: AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Zero: ABILITY ACTIVATE! DOOM SHIELD!
Starstriker: It's not enough ZEROOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Zero: Ability ability! ARGH there's no use!



Normal chat mode:
So now welcome to the superiors! Said Jupitar.
Superiors? Said Zero.
Yeah that's gonna be our team name. Got any ideas of how we can stop the chaos bakugan? Said Jupitar.
Ofcourse! The only way to stop the chaos bakugan is to defeat all the 12 Guardians of the chaos bakugan! Said Zero.
So how do we do that? Said Jupitar.
Beat all of them to a pulp by destroying their mechanical bakugan!
But it should be a peace of cake i guess! But anywhere i'm not walking to Syber city by foot! We are using my ride!Said Zero.
Good battling today Starstriker. Said Charzon.
But since we both know who is stronger now! Me and Zero will keep on getting stronger to beat you and Jupitar! That's a promise. Said Starstriker.



Next time on bakugan at world's end things get a shake up in Syber City who knew we first had to win the tournaments to the elite shogunners? Well certantly not me
well watch me and Starstriker competting in the tournament! Anybody could win!
But me and sriker Aren't lossing anytime soon again that we ensure!

I can see a lot of incorrect grammar, but I can tell the story is going well so far. Good job.

i'm sorry but it takes so much concentration that i don't have like you guys'!
So i get confussed! But i'll try harder!

Episode 4 or Chapter 4 Dune Punks

Ability activate!!! Phantom shadow!!! Said Zero.
Oyeah? Ability activate!!! Blazing Hummer! SAid JUpitar.
Battle over winner no one.
So Jupitar what's up with charzon sometimes not listening to you? Said Zero.
I don't know i haven't asked him yet! But i'll do that right away! Said Jupitar.
So looky what we have hear!!! A girl and a boy! You little punks hand over your bakugan! Or we can do this the easy way or the hard way!! Said the two brawlers.
No way but we'll make a deal you beat us we give you our bakugan and ride! Said Jupitar.
WHAT?!!! ARE YOU CRAZY?! Said Zero.
It sounds like little boy is scared! Hhahahahaha Said one of the brawlers.
Grr.... But fine let's do this!!!! Said Zero.


Battle chat mode:
Gate card set!
Bakugan brawl they all said.
Rise Subterra Rypherior!!
Soar Darkus Starstriker!
Soar Ventus Petromancer!!!
Rise Pyrus Charzon!!!
Hardshot: Ability activate Doom Realm!!!
Swift: Ability activate Steel charge!!!!
Zero: Ablity ACtivate Haunted Hurricane!!
Jupitar: Ablity activate Flame shield!!
I've gotta hand to ya'll you ppl suck!
Hardshot: RGH! Fine we suck ergh? Bakunano Torrent Gunner Destroy!
Rypherior: hhahahahahahaha! Now who sucks?
Swift: Bakunano Wired Hurricane Destroy!!!
Petromancer: This is gonna be good!!
Zero: Three can play at that game Bakunano Aero Phantom Destroy!!!!!
Starstriker: Time to perish you fools!
Jupitar: Wait what about me? W.E! Bakunano Heavy Blazer1
Charzon: Destroy!!
Swift: Ability activate Pyscho Hurricane!!
petromancer : Startriker time to die!!!!
Starstriker: ARgh AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!! Zero i'm sorry!!
Zero: Starstriker!!!!!!!!!
Hardshot: Nice one Swift! Ability ACTIVATE Heavy duty smasher!!!!!!!!
Rypherior: Your out classed Charzon!!
Charzon: uh uh uhuh A little help please?
Jupitar: Abili....
Swift: Gate card open! Enemy silence!!!! Now you can't do anything!!
Hardshot: Ability activate!!! Radioactive Madness!
Charzon: AAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!! My mind!!!!!
Swift: Ability activate swift strike!!!!!!
Charzon: Argh! Jupitar i'm ......... sorry.
Battle over winner Swift and Hardshot.


Story chat mode

Hahahaha! CYA losers!!! the two brawlers said.
GRRRRRRRR....... THIS ALL YOUR FAULT!! NOW WE'VE GOT NO RIDE NOR BAKUGAN!!! Zero shouted with anger.
I know you don't have to rub it in!!! But hey! i've got an idea!

Ok so you'll think it'll work?? Said Zero.
i'm positive! .
Ok let's focus our energy together! Said Jupitar.
-power's showing in aura's of their attribute-
Slicerix guardian of the dark i call for you!!!!!!
Torrento guardian of the flame i call for you!!!!!!
(Jupitar see's Torrento in her mind)
(Zero see's Slicerix in his mind)
Why have you called us ???
WE ARE IN NEED OF YOUR HELP!!!
Why should we help you?
WE WANT TO DESTROY THE CHAOS BAKUGAN AND SAVE THE PLANET!!!
BUT WE NEED OUR BAKUGAN BACK!!! TO DO SO!!!
Very well!!!
-the guardians turn into ball form-
( the two wake up)
URGH that was weird! They both said.
What's this??? The guardians heard our plead!! But we musn't mess up this time!!! Said Jupitar
Ok now we have to find those two or we find you!!Zero and the two brawlers said.
You two again!! Just in time we want our bakugan back and your help on our team!! Said Jupitar.
You know the rules!! You have to beat us!! Said the two brawlers.

Battle chat mode
Gate card set. said Zero.
Bakugan brawl they all said.
Rise pyrus Charzon!!
Soar Darkus Starstriker!!
Rise pyrus torrento!!
Rise Darkus Slicerix!!

Jupitar and Zero: Ability aactivate!!! Flame and Dark nebulise!!!!!!
Swift: ohhh snap!!! bakugan brawl! soar petromancer!!!
Zero: Welcome back star!!!
Hardshot: Grrrr..... Bakugan brawl!! Rise subterra Rypherior!!
JUpitar: I missed you Charzon!!
Jupitar and Zero: Pyrus vs Darkus!!
Swft and Hard shot: Two can play at that game!!!!! Ability activate!!!!! Ventus and Subterra!!
Jupitar: Elegent flame thrower!
Zero: Dark Necromancer!!!!!
Swift and Hardshot: Like we'll let you win !! Mechtogan!!! Tusven! Terrahard!!!
Jupitar: RRgh??????
Zero: Hmmmmm Gate card open energy switch and ability activate dark void!!!!
Hardshot and swift: ARGH? AAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHH of snap!!!!
Batlle over winners Zero and Jupitar.

Story chat mode


Our deal states you join us now!! Said Jupitar.
We'd be honoured!! Working with such powerful brawlers!!! Said Swift and Hardshot.
But our real names are Ace and Draco! Said Ace and Draco.
So let's get to syber city and derstroy the chaos bakugan! Said Zero.
So they're now off to complete the first phase in their mission, but we they succeseed or perish? Nobody knows so tune in next time on Bakugan at worlds end!!!

So this is Syber city ,heh? said Jupitar.
Ahh smells the same . Said Zero smelling the air.
So what next from here?Asked Jupitar puzzled.
There said Zero pointing to the tallest tower in the city.
We have to destroy that factory no matter what, but in order to do so we need to get undreground .explaind Zero.
Ewww.........No way am I walking in a sewer !! Exclaimed Jupitar.
Ok....Tell me how it feels like in prison. said Zero.
Darn...But i'm gonna be on ur back the whole walk.suggested Jupitar.
hahaha.........No!said Zero.

-LATER THAT WALK-

I think we are being followed. stated Jupitar.
I know we are but keep it down we would'nt want our fellow friend to know that we know now would we. Just keep quiet and follow my lead .said Zero with a serious face.-as they were walking the day grew darker and darker -
I'm soo cold .said Jupitar snuggling her way into Zero's arms.
wow i didn't suspect that well here out on my jacket. Nero said while handing over his jacket to her.
Thaks . said Jupitar looking Zero right in the eyes and thought (wow Zero's actually pretty cute)
Right then they both drew in for a kiss until a loud noise was heard.
What was that!!! .shouted Jupitar with fear.
Zero looked around untill he caught a glimpse of a girl who seemed to be with an older boy whose dresed brown clothes .
Hey!!! You . shouted Zero while chasing the two children.
Come back here ! I just wanna talk. he kept on shouting.
Just then 6 bakugan flew out of nowhere and said, hello Zero!!!
Zero who was stuck in terror of looking at the somewhat ventus darkus subterra and aquos bakugan he someone knew. Jupitar caught up to the two children and said, Gotcha , whats two children like yourselfs doing here anyway?
The little boy smilled and took out a bakumeter and said ,
Thoose who ask to much are always invlolved in too much...
The little girl continued for the boy and said, only the strong can lead the weak and only the smart can out smart the strong.

Jupitar smilled and said, so thats how its gonna be eh? Well then lets get this over and done with rigt Charzon.
Yes... We humbulblky accept your challenge. said Charzon.
Bakugan BRAwl

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-Actually reading it for the first time- -reads that you think I'm a good writer- I'm not going to ban you for saying I'm a bad writer, I know I am. lol, great job so far!